You recently stayed at your friend’s place, to look after the house while he/she is away. You accidentally damaged something in his/her house. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, you should: describe what the accident was explain when it happened suggest how the damage can be fixed.

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Dear Kate, I hope all is going well with you. You never guess what happened. Actually, I'm writing to you because there was a little bit of accident in your house. Well, I must confess to you. Do you remember my little sister Anny?

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weekend she came to me. I'm ashamed but Annie broke your grandmother's jug. So let me tell you about it.

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weekend she came to me. As you know I was still looking after your house. After dinner we decided to watch TV and long time we were trying to find a remote.

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I looked for it on the top of the shelf and at the same moment I heard a strange sound. There were so many pieces of glass. Anny was clumsy and she struck a jug from TV’s tumb. Please don’t worry I know where your grandmother bought

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jug. I remember how it was important to you, so I’ll go to the same store with your grandmother and we’ll buy it. I promise you

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before you return I’ll fix all. If you want please give me your suggestion. Truly, I'm so sorry. Can’t wait to hear from you. Best regards, Evgeniia

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

201 words

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