The range of technology availabe to people is increasing the gap between the rich and the poor. Others think it has opposite effect. Dicuss both views and give your opinions.

Nowadays, the wide variety of technological advancements
are
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increasing and
bring
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bringing
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many benefits to human
life
.
While
technology
can narrow the gap between social classes,
i
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would argue that improved
equipments
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equipment
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have created a distance in social relationship. On the one hand,
technology
has improved many opportunities for poor
people
in income activities. Unemployed
people
can find available jobs that don't require qualifications or experience.
For instance
, they can easily find housemaids on applications which helps housewives
to
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earn a stable salary.
Moreover
, many volunteer associations are established by
people
with well-off lives to help some
diffilcult
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difficult
situations through seeing on
internet
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the internet
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.
For example
, a huge of
people
use modern
phone
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that
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they often share or see the hard
life
of
people
with poor conditions that their lives are better after.
On the other hand
, the cost of
technology
is quite
higher
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which is not suitable for all the
people
in society,
such
as Artificial Intelligence (AI). Both technologies are facilitating rich
people
to lead a more productive
life
.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, it not only improves
lifestyle
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the lifestyle
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of favouring
rich
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the rich
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but
also
creates barriers for the poor
people
in availing some fundamental rights
as
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health and wellness services because these
thing
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are
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expensive.
For example
, private hospitals are normally equipped with the most advanced technologies which costs a lot to treat cancer and some cases
had
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dead
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because of
lacking
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a lack
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of money. In conclusion, I admit that
technology
plays a crucial part in our
life
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lives
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, but it was made for human purposes because today's society often pursues material
life
,
technology
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and technology
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creating a gap between rich and poor is inevitable.
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