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the chart below shoes information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989.

the chart below shoes information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989.
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The bar chart provided information on
changes
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 in average house charges in New York (USA), Frankfurt (Germany), Madrid (Spain), London (UK), and
Tokyo
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 (
Japan
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) from 1990 to 2002 compared with the average house cost in 1989.
Overall
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, between 1990 and 1995 only two cities made slight
changes
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, and the three other countries declined.
However
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, the proportion of house charges from 1999 to 2002 surged for four countries,
while
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Tokyo
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 (
Japan
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) diminished. Frankfurt (Germany) has escalated
changes
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 compared the ratio from 1989 prices and made it to the highest country in midpoint from 1990 to 1995 by approximately 3%,
whereas
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 the lowest ratio
changes
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 stated to both countries which London (UK) and
Tokyo
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 (
Japan
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) with well under zero
percent
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per cent
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. From 1996 to 2002,
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Tokyo
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Tokyo's
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 (
Japan
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)’s ratio
has
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dramatically climbed to just beyond 10%,
while
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Tokyo
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 is still under 0% but has moderately
leveled
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levelled
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 up.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words changes, tokyo, japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
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