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The Chart below gives information about the age of women in Australia when they gave birth to their first child in 1966, 1986 and 2006. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making relevant comparisons.

The Chart below gives information about the age of women in Australia when they gave birth to their first child in 1966, 1986 and 2006. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making relevant comparisons.
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The provided bar chart depicts the information related to first-child birthing in
a different ranges
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a different range
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 of ages in Australia over three periods (1996,1986, and 2006).
Overall
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, the figures showed an upward trend for females in the 20's, 35-39, and 40's.
While
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women
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 in their 19's and 25-29 showed a downward trend. Looking at the information in more detail, the proportion of
women
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 at the age of 30 was noticeably higher, at over 60% in 1996.
However
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, the percentage at the beginning of the period dramatically decreased to 50% and reached a low point of 40%
at the end
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 of the period. The lowest rates were revealed by the age of above 40, at 1% in 1966 before slightly decreasing in two years in a row.
Then
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, it was followed by
women
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 in the age of 35-39. The trend shows
fluctuation
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a fluctuation
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 of
women
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 who gave birth at 25-29, at a starting point of about 38% and ending at 41% in 2006.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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