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The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities.

The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities.
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The graph and chart illustrate dates on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius and the average figure of
days
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 with rain each month for
Brisbane
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 and
Canberra
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 in Australia.
It is clear that
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 the highest and lowest temperatures in
Brisbane
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 are higher than in
Canberra
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.
Also
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, from June to October, rainfall of both Cities have opposite trends. In
Brisbane
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, the biggest average temperature takes place in February at 30℃. Followed by 27℃ from December to February in
Canberra
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. The lowest average temperature of
Brisbane
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 at 10℃ in July and August, 10 times as much as that of
Canberra
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 in June and July. Looking at the average number of times with rainfall in two Australian cities. The average number of rainy
days
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 is highest from December to April. With the largest number of 14 rainy
days
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 in a month. In
Canberra
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, the amount of moisture is hugest in June,July,August and October, at 10
days
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 with rainfall every month.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words days, brisbane, canberra with synonyms.
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