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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The line graph below explains the figures of
stories
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 that closed The line graph below explained the figures of
stories
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 that close it.
Also
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 at the same time a new
stories
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, new
stories
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 opening in one on one island from 2011 to
Overall
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, in 2013 people closed their
shops
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, which is considerably closer to other
years
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, without opening a lot of
shops
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. without opening a lot of
shops
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on the other hand
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. In 2015, there was a clear drop in closers,
however
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, the
number
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 of new
shops
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 increased sharply in 2011 and clearly fell for closers.
Moreover
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, new
shops
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 increased sharply in 2011. First of all, in 2011 community, so enormous
number
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 of recent first of all in 2011 community, so enormous
number
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 of recent story
stories
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, which went up to about 8,400. But after
years
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,
this
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number
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 is less than 50%. but after
years
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,
this
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number
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 is less than 1015.
In addition
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, they proved from 2050 to 2016 in 4000. At the same time, from 2011 to 2012 the
shops
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, closer
consequently
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 under
years
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 of 2013 percentage by about a quarter. the
shops
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, closer significantly under yours of 2013 they percentage about a quarter
also
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 in 2015 noticeably shows that nobody didn't close his story, wish they percentage of almost 0%.
however
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, there is stability between 2016 to 2018.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words stories, shops, years, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "explains" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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