The pie charts show the main reasons for migration to and from the UK in 2007.

The pie charts show the main reasons for migration to and from the UK in 2007.
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The pie charts compare the most important factors people came and left the
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in 2007.
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, it is obvious definite jobs accounted for the highest percentage of why humans
migration
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to and from the
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. Meanwhile, formal
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studies
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study
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attracted more
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migrants
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migrant
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migrants
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into
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country
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year. The proportion of immigrants to the
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for a definite job was almost equal to migration from it at 30% and 29 % respectively. As we can see the figure for joining was close too, 15% for coming, and 14% for leaving people. The number who left the
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because of looking for work was far from people entering. In detail, the number for the former was at around 22% and 12 % for the latter. And
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reason which was in the second place of immigrants into
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country was
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study at 26%
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, for this reason,
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for
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reason was just 7% migration from it.
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