The charts below show reasons for travel and the main issues for the travelling public in the US in 2009.

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The bar chart provides information about what are the reasons people travel

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the pie chart describes what is the main issue for the travelling public in the US in 2009.

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the graphs that most people claim that business trips are the main purpose and they have issues with trouble financing their tour. Looking first at the bar graph, the proportion of Americans going out for commuting to work stood at 49%,

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the figure for those leaving their house for personal reasons accounted for 19%. Meanwhile, a similar allocation observed between Shopping and Personal reasons stood at 16 % and 19% respectively,

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visiting friends or relatives accounted for the lowest percentage, at only 6%. Turning to the pie graph, respondents mentioned that the price of their journey as one difficulty they encountered, stands out as the most popular, with 36%

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the proportion of safety concerns at 19%.

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, 17% of US citizens were concerned about aggressive drivers,

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highway congestion made 14% of them worried when leaving their

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, access to public transportation and places for people to walk are the

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of popularity, at 8% and 6%, respectively.

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The charts below show reasons for travel and the main issues for the travelling public in the US in 2009.

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