Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views.

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There is a big discussion
whether
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about whether
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its
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it's
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better to start your
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post-graduate
life as a university student or to start a
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professional
career
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right after
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school.
This
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essay will focus on reviewing both points of view. On
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the one
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hand, as a support for getting
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a bachelor
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bachelor
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bachelor's
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degree people argue that, it is
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crucial
for
successful
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a successful
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career
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in a number of jobs to have a good education in your field of interest. We can look at lawyers, it is well known that clients tend to hire
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specialists
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with
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degrees
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from
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high ranking
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high-ranking
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university
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universities
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.
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just in order to start your path as an example surgeon you would need a PhD.
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, a lot of successful
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entrepreneurs
started
business
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businesses
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at their alma mater, like
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Mark Zukerberg, his platform Facebook
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created as a student network in his university.
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, we have a strong opposition to that argument.
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, in
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most
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countries
education is not free,
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and student
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loans
together with
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cost
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the cost
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of living are going up every year.
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the end of
traditional
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the traditional
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4 year
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4-year
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academic path students end up in huge dept, that sometimes will be paid
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to the end of
there
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their
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career
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careers
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.
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, there are a lot of highly paid jobs, that
does
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do
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not
requare
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require
a PhD nesserely, like programmists, historians, politicians and many
other
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others
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. As an
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most presidents of the USA
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had a
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bachelor's
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degree in anything close to politics. Eisenhower
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was
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a general before he took
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office, and Reagan was a famous actor.
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, if you plan to go into business,
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any college
whoud
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would
be just a waste of time,
becouse
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because
business
stategy
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strategy
depends is unique in every
sitiuation
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situation
and
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success in that field
higly
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highly
depend
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depends
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on your luck and
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imagination
, not on your diploma.
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a
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conclusion, I will
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give
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my personal opinion. I think both positions have a right to exist. If a
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person
dreams about
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career
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a career
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in medicine or
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engineering
it is
neccesery
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necessary
to have a specific PhD, but if you want to start a company, or you have an interest in programming maybe it will be better to save your time and money and start to work right after the school.
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coherence cohesion
Make sure your essay is well-organized. Each paragraph should deal with a single main idea, clearly introduced at the beginning and followed by supporting statements. For even better clarity, you might consider using more linking words or phrases to guide the reader through your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Try to keep your introduction and conclusion concise and to the point, directly addressing the task and summarizing your views clearly. This approach helps the reader to understand your position and the structure of your essay from the beginning.
task achievement
To further strengthen your essay, ensure that each argument or viewpoint you present is supported by specific examples or evidence. While you provided some examples, aiming for even more precise and varied evidence can significantly enrich your arguments.
task achievement
To achieve a higher score in task achievement, ensure your essay comprehensively addresses all parts of the prompt, offering a balanced discussion of the two views before presenting your own opinion. Your conclusion can tie everything together more effectively by summarizing the comparative advantages or disadvantages in a succinct manner.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Academic qualifications
  • Specialized skills
  • In-depth knowledge
  • Personal growth
  • Social development
  • Practical experience
  • Financial independence
  • Career progression
  • Professional networking
  • Education
  • Work experience
  • Successful career
  • Personal interests
  • Career goals
  • Decision-making process
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