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The chart below gives some of the most reported issues among people living in UK cities in 2008.

The chart below gives some of the most reported issues among people living in UK cities in 2008.
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The bar graph illustrates people’s reports, who live in major UK
cities
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, about issues that they are facing
with include
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including
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 Education and Training, Health Services and air pollution in 2008.
Overall
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, problems
about
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with
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 health services
become
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became
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 a major issue in 5 different
cities
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,
while
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, Education and training issues followed after that. Regarding Health Services, more than 50%
percent
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per cent
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 of people reported it as an issue throughout all the
cities
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. In Belfast, nearly 60% of residents experienced
issue
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issues
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 in that field and it is the biggest number when
compare
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compared
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 with other
cities
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. Newcastle, Birmingham and Cardiff
following
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followed
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 that with
average
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an average
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50
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of 50
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%.
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, in London and
Glasgow
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Glasgow,
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 people have
concern
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a concern
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 about Educational and training problems more than others with nearly 52% and 53% respectively.
However
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, air pollution only
take
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little
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a small
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 portion
as
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of
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a
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the
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 problem in these two
cities
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by
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apply
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less than 15%. Less than 5% of people
worried
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are worried
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 about Air pollution in New Castle.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cities with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • affordable housing
  • urban areas
  • overcrowding
  • homelessness
  • traffic congestion
  • car ownership
  • public transportation systems
  • commuting times
  • air pollution
  • industrial activities
  • air quality
  • green spaces
  • urbanization
  • mental health
  • crime rates
  • socio-economic factors
  • sense of security
  • waste management
  • waste disposal
  • recycling
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