The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of junk food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000

The line graph illustrates the proportions of part-time employed

university

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students categorised by the five distinct British academic institutions from 1998 to 2008.

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the percentage of

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type of student climbed in terms of three from five universities,

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Langsdale

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a downward trend. Without a doubt, working part-time during the studies became more popular during the analyzed time period. Three out of five universities, to illustrate the point, could increase the share of

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category.

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Middleridge

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and

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Highcastle

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increased their percentage steadily to 75% and 65 %, respectively,

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Finckleborough

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interestingly experienced a steep growth from 18 % in 2005 to over 65 % in 2008.

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Langsdale

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could not follow the upward trend and ,

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, decreased its proportion of part-time working students.

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,in 1998.the percentage was outstandingly high

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60 %

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compared to the other universities, despite some fluctuation from 1998 to 2002, a steady fall started at 50 % and reached 30 % in 2008