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The grahp, demonstrates the increase on population of three countries, Columbia,Yambilland Washington in the U.S state of Oregon, between 1940 and 2000.

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The
grahp
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graph
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 demonstrates the
increase
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population
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the population
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 of three countries,
Columbia
,Yambilland
Washington
 in the
U.S
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U.S.
 state of Oregon, between 1940 and 2000. In 1940,
Columbia
 had the
steadily
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population
 of three counties, at around 25 000.
This
 compared with about
30 000
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30,000
 in
Yamhill
 and roughly
75 000
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75,000
 in
Washington
. By 1940 between 1970 the leader of
this
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 three
contries
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countries
 was
Washington
,and the stunted one was
Columbia
.
Columbia
's residents had grown to just under 36,000.
Yamhill
's
population
 rose gradually by nearly 50% from 30 000 to under 45 000.
However
, the greatest real
increase
 was in
Washington
, where the
population
 was growing from
75 000
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75,000
 to
125 000
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125,000
. The years 1970 to 2000 saw the inhabitants of
Columbia
 and
Yamhill
 enlarge by approximately the similar amounts that they had increased by thirty years before. In 2000,
Columbia
's populace - at approximately 76,000- was
treble
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 what it had been in 1940. In the same way,
Yamhill
's
population
, at around 90,000, was almost
treble
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triple
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 what was in 1940. Despite
Washington
's
increase
 in
population
 between 1940 and 1970
was
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 ample, its
increase
 in the following thirty years was even sharper, rising from about 125,000 in 1970tj
more
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 than 240,000 in 2000.
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