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Some people argue that all experimentation on animals is bad and should be outlawed. However, others believe that important scientific discoveries can be made from animal experiments. Can experimentation on animals be justified? Are there any alternatives?

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Some people argue that all experimentation on
animals
 is bad and should be outlawed,
whereas
, others feel that crucial scientific discoveries can be made from animal
experiments
. There is no denying
fact
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the fact
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 that annually many
animals
 die or suffer from
experiments
 but without
that
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that,
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 we would be unable to
use
 many products that we
use
 today, or we
could
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would
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 not have
a
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the
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 knowledge that we have today
due to
the
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apply
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scientific discoveries.
For instance
, we daily
use
 items which were tested by
animals
 and we know for sure that it is safe
consequently
 we can
use
it
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them
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 without fearing for
health
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our health
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,
in addition
 for scientific discoveries people
use
animals
 and if everything goes right
then
 they do those
experiments
 on human beings and if we do not do those experiment on
animals
 many individuals would die or suffer and
that is
 the reason why I strongly believe that there are not any alternatives From my point of view experimentation on
animals
 can be justified, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages, even though
experiments
 can have some dreadful consequences on
animals
, there are cases where it can be justified,
for example
, animal testing is sometimes seen as necessary for ensuring the safety of products and medical procedures before they are used on humans. It can help identify potential risks and prevent harm to individuals. In conclusion, there are no alternatives to stop
animals
 from being experimented on,
in
addition
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addition,
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 the advantages of testing
animals
 outweigh the disadvantages and
experiments
 on
animals
 can be justified
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scientific breakthroughs
  • ethical concerns
  • alternatives
  • animal testing
  • moral implications
  • ethical considerations
  • vivisection
  • research methods
  • ethical dilemmas
  • animal welfare
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