some people think that it is beneficial to travel abroad, but others think it is unnecessary because we have the Internet and TV. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, more
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often
we can see
poeple
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people
travel
around the
world
. Some people have
idea
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an idea
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that we can watch the same
travel
destination
through
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on
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TV
or
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the internet
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internet
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while
others think
traveling
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will give more
benifits
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benefits
for
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to
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travelers
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travellers
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.
My
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point of view,
travel
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travelling
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abroad will provide more advantages than watching those places in
the
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digital media, In
this
essay I will discuss both views and will give the reasons for that. Most
of
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the
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peole
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people
travel
as
thier
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their
hobby, after stressful work life they save their annual leaves for
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a walk
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around the
world
,
consequently
, they will have a lot of
benifits
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benefits
from
traveling
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.
This
a different
experience
that some will have in a once their lifetime
such
as
traveling
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by
air plane
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aeroplane
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and
visit
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visiting
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new
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a new
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country. If we
travel
to the place we will have a chance to see every
details
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in
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with
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our bare eyes in that place.
Moreover
,
this
feeling we can not explain
without
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this without
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experiencing
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experiencing it
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.
For example
, If you visit
Taj
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the Taj
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Mahal you can go inside it, explore all over details of the
architechral
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architecture
that they used and
experience
the New Dhili city culture and food
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also
.
However
, we can watch
programm
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programmes
about
traveling
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travelling
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all around the
world
in
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on
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TV
or
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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. Because there are a lot of sources in the modern
world
without going there we can watch
such
as
TV
programm
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programmes
or YouTube
channel
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channels
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.
This
will save our money and time,
due to
traveling
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travelling
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will require
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a consideralbe
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consideralbe amout
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considerable amount
of funds. We can use
this
money for our future
such
as
children
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education or buying a property. For
instant
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, if you turn to
"
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the "Travel
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Travel
Xp"
TV
channel you could
have
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travel
around the
world
in a day or I you go to YouTube there will be a lot of videos. In conclusion,
traveling
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is an art, we can not get that
experience
through
TV
programm
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programmes
or
video
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videos
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, we really need to
travel
those
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to those
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places to get the
reall
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real
experience
.
However
, sometimes you have to spend a considerable amount
for
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traveling
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travelling
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but that
experience
is worth
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more than
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than
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apply
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that
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the
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money you
spent
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spend
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • opportunity
  • exposure
  • cultural diversity
  • explore
  • immersive experience
  • language proficiency
  • intercultural communication
  • networking
  • global perspective
  • adaptability
  • experience new things
  • broaden horizons
  • virtual resources
  • convenience
  • accessibility
  • information overload
  • virtual reality
  • face-to-face interaction
  • personal connections
  • empathy
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  • unique
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