More and more couples are deciding to be "child-free", to have no children, in other words. Some people claim that those couples reach this conclusion through entirely selfish reasons. While others think that they came to this decision through noble motives, such as concern about overpopulation and desire for independence. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There are an ever-increasing number of
couples
who decide to have no
children
or become “
child-free
”. Some
people
argue that
this
issue is coming from the egoistic
reason
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reasons
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of those
couples
.
While
, the rest think
the
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motives are becoming their fundamental
reasons
to reach
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that decision,
such
as concern about overpopulation and eagerness for independence. In my opinion, sometimes
couples
have to consider that having
children
becomes an important thing,
however
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they have their own choice whether to have a child or not. On the one hand, having
children
is dreamed
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many
couples
and families. Most of them expect to have descendants so they can regenerate their family and culture. Because of that,
couples
who choose to be
child-free
have to look at their surroundings, not only their own perspectives which are considered as ungrateful, egoist, and deviant
people
. Not only about that but
also
to increase the number of populations in some countries.
For example
, Japan has a small population and the government constrains the
people
to have
children
so they can conserve their culture in the future
,
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because most
couples
in Japan decided to have no
children
.
On the other hand
, there are other
reasons
which may be believed by some
people
that may be the cause of the summary to be a
child-free
of many
couples
,
such
as having concern about the population, and
also
having
desire
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to be an independent couple. Those
reasons
are rational because
in
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some countries,
such
as China and India, have
numerous
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populations and
also
poverty which means that the government has to control the birth of
children
in their country, so the
child-free
couple helps those issues.
Furthermore
, having
children
means having big responsibilities as well, not only to give birth but
also
to educate them well. Gita,
for instance
, is a woman who has
self-confidence
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to be
child-free
due to
personal
reasons
,
such
as she has trauma and
had
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a bad experience when she was a child, so she chose to have no
children
.
To sum up
, becoming
child-free
is one of the human rights whatever the
reasons
are. Many
couples
consider
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to be
child-free
due to
some
reasons
, either personal or virtuous motives.
However
, there are some
people
who are against
this
idea and force
couples
to have
children
.
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