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Writing Samples
Band 7.5

You are planning a short visit to a city where one of your relatives lives. Write a letter to your relative. In your letter: • Explain when and how long you will be in town. • Ask whether you can stay at their home. • Offer to pay for yourself. You do not need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ...,

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Dear John, Thank you for your mail. I am writing
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 letter to explain some crucial things about my trip. As you know, I am taking a short tour
to
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 your city,
Hanoi
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, for some work.
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, I have never been to your city before. I want to know many thrilling features of
Hanoi
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. I am planning to take a 5-day jaunt. I believe
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 is enough to do my business with Samsung and to travel around
Hanoi
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. As a newcomer, I do not know many things about
Hanoi
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. I would really appreciate it if you could inform me of some well-known attractions and local specialities as well. I think
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 expedition can help me to geographically know more about countries and cities.
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, I may understand you more. Accommodation is
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 an important thing to concern. I would be grateful if you could put me up
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 I am in
Hanoi
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. But if not, can you please find a hotel for me? I would really appreciate it. If you want any
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 information, please do not hesitate to inform me. I am looking forward to your response and to
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 travel.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly express all points mentioned in the task statement. For example, reiterate your purpose for the visit and emphasize your willingness to pay for accommodation.
coherence cohesion
Consider linking your ideas more smoothly to enhance the flow of your writing. Transitional phrases could further improve coherence.
task achievement
Your letter has a friendly and polite tone, which is suitable for communicating with a relative.
task achievement
You have included relevant content about your visit and asked for assistance regarding accommodation, which reflects good task understanding.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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