A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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the criteria of a person’s worth
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on social status and material possessions rather than moral values like honour, trust and kindness. I completely disagree with
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, The relationship recently focused only on a person’s job and how spending money for gifts and flowers for dating and impress the partner, and even when you got married .
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when you introduce for marriage, the agreement depends on your luxury life and how much spent on the wedding ceremony, venue, party and services
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, Material possessions seem to be most important for social acceptance. What fascinating
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, cars, dressing, bags, and
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you have.
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people from technology, and will, inheritance for children and next generation On the other
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on moral appearances ,how men
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and women kindness and all of these
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hidden by luxury and technology In conclusion, I strongly disagree
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how society
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social status
  • Material possessions
  • Old-fashioned values
  • Honour
  • Kindness
  • Trust
  • Judged
  • Importance
  • Traditional
  • Reflection
  • Achievements
  • Hard work
  • Disregarded
  • Well-balanced
  • Meaningful
  • Cultural norms
  • Societal norms
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