In order for the world to be a ‘greener’ place, punishment and fines for environmentally unfriendly acts committed by individuals need to be more severe. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It will not be overstated that the world we are living

today

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is more likely to be unhospitable

due to

the massive reduction of green areas as a response to

people

’s irresponsibility, causing other related problems

such

as worse pollution and landslides. To cope with

this

issue, it is believed that stricter

punsihments

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punishments

punishment

and

fines

should be regulated for those who have done activities that harm the

environment

they habituate. I wholeheartedly stand for

this

argument with two major reasons: the possibility to lessen

people

’s environmentally destructive tendencies

as well as

the prospect of generating income for conservating the

environment

from the punishments and

fines

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. Let’s begin by witnessing one of the main characteristics that most

people

have, which is destructive. In most cases,

people

will try as best as they can to meet their demands even by neglecting or

destorying

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destroying

the organized sets of rules including nature with no exception.

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this

given attribute, there should be regulations that control

people

’s

behavior

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so that they

could

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be more civilized in occupying the

environment

they live

or

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utilize.

Therefore

, in making

this

come true,

government

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holds a pivotal role

to set

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severer

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penalties and

fines

so that

people

, especially those who

involve

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in industrial sectors will unavoidably follow them – because if they do not, there will be a huge amount of

fines

that they

sould

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should

could

would

pay off.

Hence

, I believe that these regulations will make

people

take greater concerns regarding the issue

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environment

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and the consequences they get if they break them.

In addition

, the presence of punishments and

fines

especially in the form of finance can be used as one of the sources of funding to conserve the

environment

. Because there will be no 100% guarantee of the absence of

this

issue,

people

who

violated

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the environmental regulations can be sentenced and the

fines

that

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generated can be allocated to preserve the damaged conservation nature.

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the case of

fire

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the fire

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that happened in Bromo

due to

the irresponsibility of a wedding organizer in Indonesia in 2023, causing more than 10 hectares

savanna

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to be devastated as an example. The involved

people

are fined

with

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more than 50 billion rupiahs and 10 years in jail. Even though

this

punishment might still seem unfair compared to

destruction

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the destruction

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they caused;

however

, at least there are

fundings

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that can be used to recover the savanna even if it does take time. All things considered, I strongly believe that the presence of

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punishments

punishment

and

fines

is a crucial aspect in order to make the

environment

we live

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greener place. Considering the probability

to diminish

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of diminishing

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people

’s environmentally destructive

behavior

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behaviour

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and to be a way to yield income for conservating the

environment

objectives,

therefore

, implementing severe punishments and

fines

is

a

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right choice.