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Do you agree that modern technology has given us more leisure time than before.

#technology #leisure #time
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Nowadays, it is obvious that smart
devices
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 have improved living standards and created more free
time
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 than in the past. In my point of view, I partly agree with
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 statement. To start with, the modern machine supports humans in both household and working tasks. In fact, Smart
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 are invented to help the quality of life more easily and helpful. First of all, automatic robots can sweep the floor or hoover a carpet
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 of humans.
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, human beings, normally women, can have more
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 for themselves.
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, an internet connection empowers the worker to work from afar; so that they can save
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 from travelling and
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 become more productive.
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, the fact that online meetings with customers can be organized at home
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 of wasting a long
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 taking a trip allows
people
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 to spend more
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 with their families and their hobbies. Despite many advantages, modern technology can
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 be detrimental to our lives regarding
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 skill development and finance.
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, more smart
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 are invented means that
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 are likely to be dependent and irresponsible in their jobs. To be specific, not doing household for their whole life can prevent children from taking care of themselves without modern technology. Another effect is working opportunities can be taken from the blue-collar worker, which results in a high unemployment rate. Another aspect that needs considering is that modern
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 usually cost
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 a large amount of money which makes
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's budgets tighter. In conclusion, modern technology has helped humans do housework and empowered 9-to-5 work;
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,
people
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 should not depend on smart
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 so much, they must keep the balance between the human and machine workforce in order to utilize the positive effects and prevent negative ones.
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