Some people think that because of email and telephone, communication among people is less personal now than it used to be. Do you agree or disagree with that view.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Face-to-face interactions
  • Non-verbal cues
  • Emotional depth
  • Digital communication
  • Convenience
  • Time-efficient
  • Misunderstandings
  • Instant messaging
  • Social media
  • Connected
  • Accessibility
  • Swift decision-making
  • Documentation
  • Formal tone
  • Altered the landscape
  • Emotional connection
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