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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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As the number of
professionals
 working abroad increases, it is often discussed whether they should stay where they did their training or they should be free to move to another
country
 if they desire to.
While
 I believe that a person should be free to migrate, I agree that it has negative effects on the
country
 of training. On the one hand,
professionals
 who decide to work abroad are seeking a different lifestyle and career opportunities.
Therefore
, they should be allowed to improve their lives outside the limitations of their
country
 of origin.
For example
, whilst in Spain residents in a hospital do not have hands-on experience
due to
 safety measures, in other countries
such
 as Argentina, residents actually practice their skills with patients.
Besides
, cultural exchanges have proven to increase efficiency, since different nationalities mean different beliefs and the introduction of new methods.
On the other hand
, when
professionals
 leave the
country
 where they trained, countries are damaged socially and economically. In countries where the government provides free education and healthcare, many people think that the population should compensate the
country
 for their skills and abilities.
Furthermore
, as a study of South African emigration has pointed out when a professional leases the
country
 it results in the loss of 10 unskilled jobs.
Therefore
 it affects the economy and the community. Taking everything into account, it can be said that moving out from the
country
 of training should not be taken lightly, given the adverse effects on the population.
However
, I firmly believe that someone's professional development should not depend on their
country
 of origin and
professionals
 should be allowed to look for better opportunities overseas.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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