The shown Line graph below illustrates the condition of participation by club members to different courses.

The line graph provides information about the conditions of participation by club members in three courses : swimming, team sports, and

gym

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activities.

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, team sports and

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activities showed short growth,

by comparison

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, swimming activities showed a significant decline. In 1995 swimming was very popular and held the top spot but in the next 10

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, it showed a very sharp fall from 50% to approximately 15%.

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, the next five

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it showed

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rise of about 2 per cent between 2010 and 2015.

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, in 1995

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sections was less interesting than other and held the

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spot with a tiny minority (5%). To the surprise,

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sections were able to show a dramatic rise from 5 per cent to about 28%. But after five

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, it lost a little bit of progress about 2-3 per cent. From 1995 to 2000, team sports were without any significant changes and showed approximately one of three (33%).

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, in the next ten

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it illustrates

modest

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peak at 33% to 40%. Unfortunately, the

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between 2010 and 2015 were lamentable since they lost progress and

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back to their original value.