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Many old buildings are protected by law because they are part of nation's history. However, some people think old buildings should be knocked down to make way for new ones because people need houses and offices. How important is t to maintain old buildings

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Nowadays , old
building
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 bridge taking a part of
countries
 budget and place , and
this
 building is under monitoring in all time. A
lot
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 believe that
government
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 should not take
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this
 historical Arcana because people
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 what they need
such
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national history
important
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 to the country and
also
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 always asks why
historical
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 building is significant for
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benefit
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results
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China now classifies as one of the most country has a tourists
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 so the government
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garden
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 and moles. Looking
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mention
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 above the population will have
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 number of funny places but they have a significant
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to
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 useful buildings
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hospital
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. I fully agree with
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island
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instead
to build
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 their needs so now the community suffering a
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poverty. In
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 as there are a
lot
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reason
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 to protracted the historical building
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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