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The graph below shows percentages of types of waste that were recycled in a town between 2000 and 2010.

The graph below shows percentages of types of waste that were recycled in a town between 2000 and 2010.
This
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 bar chart indicates recycled percentages of
plastic
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,
cans
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,
paper
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 and
glass
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waste
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 during the
years
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 between 2000 and 2010.
Overall
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, is it clear that the
percentage
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 of recycled
waste
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 has increased over the past 10
years
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.
It is clear that
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 the
Glass
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 recycling
percentage
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 over the 10
years
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 was drastically increased compared to other recycled
waste
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.
Whereas
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,
plastic
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 was the least recycled
waste
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 within
this
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 decade. In the year 1992, the
plastic
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,
cans
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,
paper
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 and
glass
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waste
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 recycled
percentage
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 stood at 10%,8%,13% and 15% respectively.
On the other hand
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, in
years
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 the
plastic
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,
cans
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,
paper
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 and
glass
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waste
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 recycled
percentage
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 were 12%, 20%,40% and 50%.
It is clear that
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, during
this
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 decade the recycling
percentage
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 has improved drastically. In mid of
this
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 10-year period, the figures for recycling percentages of
cans
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 and
paper
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 have increased significantly reaching 19% to 22%.
By contrast
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, the recycling rate of
cans
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 slightly decreased to about 11%,
while
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 the figure for plastics was just over 10%. 5
years
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 later, the recycling rates of these four types of
waste
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 experienced a dramatic increase, and the figures for them were all over 20%. 40% of metals had been recycled in the town, which is the highest recycling rate of the four types of
waste
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. the follower
was
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was canned
was canning
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cans
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, reaching 33%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "it is clear that".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words plastic, cans, paper, glass, waste, years, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recycling rates
  • types of waste
  • paper and cardboard
  • plastic and glass
  • noticable increases
  • stable
  • landfill sites
  • decrease
  • percentage
  • 10-year period
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