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You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job. Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment. In your letter- -describe the problem with the equipment -explain how this problem is affecting your work - say what you want the shop or company to do

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Dear Sir , I am one of your regular customers, and I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the
laptop
 I purchased from your reputable store
last
 week. After I had received the device, I tried to use it for working purposes, but the
laptop
 was not working properly. I was encountering many problems as
this
 electronic gadget could not create a normal Excel sheet.
Moreover
, the battery was running out fast and I had to recharge it repeatedly more than it was advertised at your establishment.
Subsequently
, I cannot do my daily tasks efficiently because the software of the
laptop
 seems to not be updated.
This
 problem makes my job hard and I am unable to finish my tasks in a professional way.As the device is under warranty, I am able to ask for repair or replacement. I want to replace the
laptop
 with a new one. I look forward to hearing from you
,
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 and thank you for your kind attention to my complaint. If you need extra information, please do not hesitate to contact me. Faithfully,
yuvi
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single idea per paragraph
In the future, ensure that each paragraph contains a single main idea to enhance clarity and focus.
complete response
Although the task is mostly achieved, consider providing more specific details about the warranty terms or how you wish them to proceed with the replacement process, which can strengthen your task achievement.
greeting and closing
Your greeting and closing are polite and align well with formal letter-writing conventions.
logical structure
The logical structure of your letter in terms of introduction, body, and conclusion is well-maintained, leading to an easy understanding of your issue.
suitable writing tone
The writing tone is formal and suitable for the intended audience, which helps convey the seriousness of your issue effectively.
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