some people think that it is beneficial to travel abroad, but others think it is unnecessary because we have the Internet and TV. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Over the past decades, the rate at which people especially the youth have migrated from their motherland is tremendous. There has been a significant rise in foreigners in the U.S.A., the U.K. and many more places than ever.

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others argue

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beneficial, others opine is not necessary since there are more technologies developed to make access to information easy. In

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essay, I will explore both views and give my opinion. On the one hand, it is one of the greatest achievements in life to travel overseas. The reasons are as follows;

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, there are better jobs abroad,

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, there is quality education and all resources needed for learning are available.

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, it was reported just recently on BBC News that the majority of African youths are relocating to the UK in

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of greener pastures. Others

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want to explore the world and

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, choose to travel around the world.

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, there are a lot of disadvantages to

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situation. Lack of family bonds is one of them and

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, a lot of these immigrants experience separation anxiety.

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, in a survey conducted among some foreigners in the UK, it was revealed that a lot of them would like to go back to their homes

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loneliness.

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there are some negative effects to

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, I do not think using the Internet and television is the best solution to that. Individuals have different reasons for relocating and as

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, surfing through the internet alone cannot meet their goals.

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, better education, good job opportunities and learning different cultures are among some of the reasons why people leave their country. I opine that it is a good development and

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, these migrants later earn enough money to open businesses in their country of origin and

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, it should be promoted.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

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309 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

opportunity
exposure
cultural diversity
explore
immersive experience
language proficiency
intercultural communication
networking
global perspective
adaptability
experience new things
broaden horizons
virtual resources
convenience
accessibility
information overload
virtual reality
face-to-face interaction
personal connections
empathy
appreciation
unique
memorable
transformative
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