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Many people still believe that riding a bicycle is the best way to get to places. What are the advantage and disadvantage of using a bicycle these days?

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It is quite common these days for people to ride a bicycle because it is the most
convenience
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 way to travel in many countries.
This
 trend would create certain benefits but there will
also
 be some drawbacks. On the one hand, there are several reasons why cycling is
benefical
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beneficial
.
Firstly
, riding a
bike
 impacts our health
such
 as weight loss and protects us from serious
diaseses
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diseases
such
 as stroke, heart attack and diabetes.
Secondly
, cycling is a
convienience
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convenient
 way to fit in daily routines by riding to the shop, the park, to school or to work.
Finally
, riding a
bike
 can help us
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 money.
Due to
 the research of Cyclescheme providers of the UK, to mark the 10th anniversary of Cycle to Work Day
last
 year, the cyclist who
cycle
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 to work could save 750 pounds
annualy
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annually
.
On the other hand
, there are
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 of disadvantages of using a bicycle these days that people should take into consideration.One
obviuos
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obvious
 drawback is that can cause pain in various parts of the body. The most
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affected
 areas are
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necks
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, shoulders, wrists and knees. One of the main
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of
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this
 uncomfortable issue is
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cyclist
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cyclists
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 need to set up
thier
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their
 bikes
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 the right size. Another negative effect is that pedestrians and
cyclists
 are exposed to more pollutants than car drivers.
In a
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 2018 study conducted by the University of Leeds discovered
thay
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that
cyclists
 inhale the fewest pollutants in congested areas
due to
thier
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their
 shorter commutes.
Furthermore
,
cyclists
 are vulnerable. There is nothing else that protects
cyclists
 from a
bike
 helmet. In the US alone, 846 bicyclists died in traffic
acciddents
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accidents
 in 2019 In conclusion,
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these days many people still believe that riding a
bike
 is the best way to get to places
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 bring about certain benefits, but its negative consequences should not be overlooked.
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