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Some people think that it is beneficial for children to do paid work, while others think it can be harmful for children. What are the advantages and disadvantages of children doing paid work?

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On the one hand, there are several benefits of do paid
work
. A common advantage is that the
jobs
 to do paid
work
 are very easy find.
For
example
, the
children
 just need apply to in suitable job for their because nowaday having many the
jobs
such
 as: serve the restaurant, seller, serve the coffee, etc,...
this
jobs
 alway recruiting staff so the
children
 can apply to
work
 anywhere. Another positive aspect can be that
children
 can do paid
work
 that paid works are very easy do and don'
t
 need knowledge high.
For
example
,
children
 apply to a serve the coffee which is very easy do because the server just
work
 is order drink, food, etc,... and ship to customer
that is
 very easy do and don'
t
 think much, don'
t
 need specialize high.
On the other hand
, I am of the opinion that the aforementioned advantages are at the expense of greater drawbacks. One obvious disadvantage is that the paid works unhealthy for the
children
.
For
example
, a server the coffee who need order, ship to customer a day but they must
work
 no break in 8 hours.
Children
 do more
then
 their health will strong decrease and lead to illness. Another negative effect is that
children
 don'
t
 comfortable about their
time
.
For
example
, when
children
 apply to paid
work
then
 they must spend
time
 much for
work
 from 6-8 hours and
not to mention
 working overtime because the boss request so
this
jobs
 will effect to their
time
 very much
such
 as: don'
t
time
 to learn, don'
t
 spent
time
 for their family, friends, etc,... because they go to
work
 for someone else so they must submit to the request of boss. In conclusion,
although
 it is beneficial for
children
 to do paid
work
, it is obvious that it can be harmful for
children
. My view is that thinking of everyone can cause more harm than benefits.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • beneficial
  • harmful
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • financial independence
  • responsibility
  • valuable skills
  • impact
  • education
  • exploitation
  • negative effects
  • social life
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