Although more and more people use public transport, some city streets are still overcrowded with traffic. How can this problem be solved? Provide specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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In
this
day and time,
transportation
is imperative and necessary in everyday life. Though
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many individuals
use
common
transportation
, it has not solved the problem of many
people
on the streets and roads. I believe
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it is an ongoing process and necessary rules and regulations must implemented
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resolve
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this
issue. I will discuss
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notion in the upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
with, own
transportation
is considered as a comfort for many
people
and
this
has been a major reason for the amplified traffic .
Firstly
, even a nuclear family nowadays own
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2 cars and they are prone to
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in
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a daily basis for various purposes like getting to work,dropping kids at school, going
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shopping
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etc
.
Secondly
, since cars and bikes
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accessible and agile, they can get to any destination without having to wait in specific stops for a long time . Though
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a community of
people
purge their comfort and travel in buses and tramps, there are many individuals who prefer commuting on their own vehicles when they come from a very long distance.
However
, there are
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ways by which
this
issue can be abated.
Initially
,
Government
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the Government
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might implement stricter rules and regulations and insist
people
to
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follow them and those who do not
act
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comply with
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should be issued
fine
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. Not only that , but authorities must amend and develop
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new
transportation
lines including new stops and places even
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suburban areas , by which
people
from those areas will not need to
use
their own vehicles to commute. In
additon
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addition
to that, children and students must be enrolled to travel only school buses and vans to schools and colleges, by doing so, early morning peak traffic can be avoided. In conclusion,there is a plethora of reasons
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why
people
either
use
public vehicles or their own. Even though, few peak hour
traffics
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traffic
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are inevitable,
by
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complying
to
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ceratin
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rules will make commuting easier for everyone who wants to travel.
Yet
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,
this
might take some time to get accustomed
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it
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but it
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can be considered as
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step to multigate traffic problems.
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