The line graph shows the average number of weekly patients visiting four clinics of a hospital from 2010 to 2016.
The line graph gives data about the average
number
of weekly patients
visiting four
clinics of a hospital from 2010 to 2016.
As can be seen, the figures of patients
to
Change preposition
with
diabetic
and eye increased, Replace the word
diabetes
the
Correct word choice
and the
number
of birth control also
rose from 2010 to 2012 then
it started
decrease Add the particle
started to
untill
2014, in 2014 it again rose, and by 2016 it had risen and was almost equal to its original Correct your spelling
until
number
. The number
of weekly patients
visiting Dental clinic
from 2010 to 2012 abruptly fell, Fix the agreement mistake
clinics
however
since Add a comma
however,
2012
it has increased.
In 2010 the Add a comma
2012,
number
of weekly patients
visiting birth
control Correct article usage
the birth
clinic
was 250 in 2016 it was almost the same. In 2010 the number
of weekly patients
visiting eye
Correct article usage
the eye
clinic
was more or less 125 by 2016 it had been 350. In 2010 the number
of weekly patients
attending Diabetic clinic
was more than 50, by 2016 Fix the agreement mistake
clinics
due to
the increasing
it had been a little less than 200. And the Replace the word
increase
number
of weekly patients
visiting to
dental originally was 100 and in 2016 the Remove the preposition
apply
number
was roughly 180Submitted by lilit_margaryan2006 on
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, patients, clinic with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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