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The graph and chart below give information about species extinctions and the threats to plant life.

The graph and chart below give information about species extinctions and the threats to plant life.
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The two charts provide information on the proportion of
species
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 that went extinct and what threatened them to
extinction
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. Tropical forest
species
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 loss rose remarkably in 2060,
then
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 it went down in 2100.
Species
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 in the world are threatened more by so many various human impacts than natural
events
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. Less than
10.000
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10,000
species
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 went extinct in 2000, but every 20 years, the damages are absolutely horrendous. Just by the year 2060, the
extinction
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 rose dramatically by about 1000% with the total absence of
50.000
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50,000
 animals and
plants
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 in tropical
forest
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forests
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,
this
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 is the highest loss over a century between 2000 and 2100. The
extinction
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then
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 decreased to slightly over
20.000
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20,000
 in 2100 with a little less than
30.000
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30,000
 loss. Human impacts have more threats to the
plants
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 than natural
events
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. It has a slightly over
four fifth
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four-fifths
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 of the
impact
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 of endangered plant
species
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while
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 natural
events
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 have a little less than a fifth of threats. Agriculture, harvesting and development
takes
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take
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 up more than half of human
impact
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 and the rest are under a tenth.
While
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 natural disasters threaten a small amount of
plants
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, other natural
events
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 participate in a little over
one tenth
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one-tenth
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 of endangered plant life.
Overall
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, the
impact
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 of endangered animals and
plants
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 to the
extinction
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 of them mostly comes from the human
impact
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. If the threats
of
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to
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 plant life and animal
species
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 are neglected, the consequent of
extinction
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 will rise eventually.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words species, extinction, events, plants, impact with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "a little less than" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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