The graph and chart below give information about species extinctions and the threats to plant life.

The graph and chart below give information about species extinctions and the threats to plant life.
The two charts provide information on the proportion of
species
that went extinct and what threatened them to
extinction
. Tropical forest
species
loss rose remarkably in 2060,
then
it went down in 2100.
Species
in the world are threatened more by so many various human impacts than natural
events
. Less than
10.000
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10,000
species
went extinct in 2000, but every 20 years, the damages are absolutely horrendous. Just by the year 2060, the
extinction
rose dramatically by about 1000% with the total absence of
50.000
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50,000
animals and
plants
in tropical
forest
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forests
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,
this
is the highest loss over a century between 2000 and 2100. The
extinction
then
decreased to slightly over
20.000
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20,000
in 2100 with a little less than
30.000
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30,000
loss. Human impacts have more threats to the
plants
than natural
events
. It has a slightly over
four fifth
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four-fifths
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of the
impact
of endangered plant
species
while
natural
events
have a little less than a fifth of threats. Agriculture, harvesting and development
takes
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up more than half of human
impact
and the rest are under a tenth.
While
natural disasters threaten a small amount of
plants
, other natural
events
participate in a little over
one tenth
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of endangered plant life.
Overall
, the
impact
of endangered animals and
plants
to the
extinction
of them mostly comes from the human
impact
. If the threats
of
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plant life and animal
species
are neglected, the consequent of
extinction
will rise eventually.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words species, extinction, events, plants, impact with synonyms.
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