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Layout of a university sports centre and its redevelopment

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The two given maps depict the University Sports Center in its current form and its proposed expansion.
It is clear that
 there will be extensive changes with regard to Outdoor courts,
while
 There are no plans to change the
center
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 of the university. The most noticeable change from the existing to the proposed plan is that there will no longer be outdoor courts when the redesigning has been done. Most of the external walls are going to be removed, and new internal walls will be built. The outdoors
that is
 located in the east will be replaced by two dance studios in the northeast, a changing room and a café in the southeast.
In addition
, the sports hall will be constructed near the seating, which will be achieved by demolishing the outdoors and removing the external wall.
Also
, the gym which is situated at the top of the university will be expanded into the east. There will be no variations related to the entrance, 25m pool and reception,
while
 the outdoor courts
that
is
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 situated in the west will be replaced by a new leisure pool in the west. Another changing room and a new sports shop will be built in the southwest.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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