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The table gives information about the population of new Zealand from 2011 to 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparison where necessary.

The table gives information about the population of new Zealand from 2011 to 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparison where necessary.
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The given table illustrates the data of
New
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the New
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 Zealand population by
age
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 groups between 2011 to 2012.
Although
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 the total population in both years doesn't have much difference, which is divided among 4 different groups and the percentage of the changes has been calculated. In 2011, the highest
people
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number of people
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are
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was
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 1,577,256 between the
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age
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ages
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15
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of 15
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-39 and the least
is
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was
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 above 65+ with a number of 573,946 including the highest percentage of change with +4%. The other two groups under 15 and 40-64
has
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have
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 population relatively
same
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the same
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with
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as
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 the rest.
In contrast
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 to the given year 2012 doesn't have much of
the
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a
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 difference in the number it just shows
slight
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a slight
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 increase. The percentage of change is highest among the above 65+
age
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 group and least in
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the child
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child
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the child
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age
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, 15-39 group.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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