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The line graph shows the changes in the populationes of six different areas of the world bwtween 1960 and 2010.

The line graph shows the changes in the populationes of six different areas of the world bwtween 1960 and 2010.
The chart illustrates the
number
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 of
people
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 changes in six
areas
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 of the globe between 1960 and 2010.
Overall
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, the figure for
people
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 raised between 1960 and 2010, but only two
areas
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 were stable.
On the other hand
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, south
Asia
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 was raised dramatically compared to other
areas
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. In1960, the
number
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 of populations in Europe & Central and South
Asia
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 was similar around 750 million
people
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 but after next years, South
Asia
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 had a significant increase so the
people
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 who lived in
this
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 area was more than in Europe & Central
Asia
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.
On the other hand
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, by 2000, the populations in the Middle East and North Africa had a gradual rise
while
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 the
number
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 of
people
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 higher than in North America became the
last
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 population area.
In addition
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, from 1960 to 2010,
the
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apply
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East
Asia
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 & Pacific has always highest populations compared to these six
areas
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.
Furthermore
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, the
number
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 of
people
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 who live in
the
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apply
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East
Asia
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 & Pacific
was
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has
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 a
gramatic
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dramatic
 increase between 1960 and 2010
become
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becoming
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second
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the second
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 highest population area.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, areas, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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