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Many people think modern communication technology is having some negative effects on social relationships. Do you agree or disagree?

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 the number of
people
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, recent message conveying technologies are having side
effects
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 on interpersonal relationships of an individuals.
However
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, there are several
people
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,
according to
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 whom social media
also
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 have some positive
effects
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. Looking from an all perspective, I strongly believe that both points are correct, which are discussed with some relevant examples. To commence with, nowadays, men and women prefers to spend their leisure time by chatting with some person over an internet,
instead
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 of visiting his or her friend living in neighbourhood.
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 they prefer to make some new
friends
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 over net, their social relationship with their families and
friends
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 is decreasing.
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: there are so many online games available for children which allows them to make some new
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while
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 playing their favourite games.
This
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 may lead to disturbance from their studies and social life.
In addition
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 to
this
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, social platforms makes
people
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 less active. Human beings prefer to spend most of their time as a couch potato.
This
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 not only waste their time
however
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, can
also
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 be the reason for numerous disease,
such
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 as obseity, diabetes and several heart related issues.
In contrast
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 to
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, there are sundry benefits of these technologies. Unlike in past,
people
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 in recent years can talk with their
friends
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, families and many other
people
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 just by sitting in different nations.
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: I have cousins living in different countries, some are in Europe
while
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 other is in America. I can talk to them just by calling them, which was not possible for
last
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 two or three decades.
To conclude
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, modern technologies may have some bad
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 on
people
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's life, somehow, it
also
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 have positive
effects
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.
This
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 totally depends on how communities are using it.
People
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 should balance their lifestyle online and world outside the social media platforms

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task achievement
Provide a clear opinion in the introduction and conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Try to develop the main points more fully with supporting details and examples.
lexical resource
Use more precise vocabulary and formal language.
grammatical range accuracy
Pay attention to sentence structure and grammar.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • face-to-face interactions
  • messaging apps
  • social media
  • non-verbal cues
  • family bonds
  • dependency
  • digital communication
  • superficial relationships
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • social isolation
  • virtual connections
  • emotional satisfaction
  • real-life interactions
  • technological intrusion
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