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Nowadays kajy people choose to be self-employed, rather that to work for a company or organaisatiom, why might this be the case? what could be the disadvantages of being self-employed

#kajy #people #work #company #organaisatiom #be #case
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Certain
 individuals ponder that reading
stories
 from a
book
 is very important
whereas
 other people opine that watching TV or playing some games
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computer
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the computer
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 is useful
their
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 knowledge. I strongly agree with
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 statement and my
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justification
 will come
further
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in further
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 paragraphs. To commence with, there are numerous advantages of reading
stories
 from a
book
.
Firstly
, they can easily increase their confidence level and grasping power which can help in their academic.
Secondly
,
with
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the daily reading of
book
 help them to learn new things and find some new
creativity
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 ideas.
Thirdly
, they boost their career in their relative field by
increase
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increasing
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 knowledge and
practise
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practice
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.
Furthermore
, nowadays,
stories
 are very demotic in
children
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children's
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live
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therefore
 more they read
a
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stories
then
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they learn more.
Additionally
, they have many opportunities come from their relative fields and easily understand
any thing
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anything
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 they want in their life thanks to the
stories
 they have read.
On the other hand
, some individuals
believ
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believe
 that if they do other activities
such
 as watching
Tv
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TV
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 or playing games
in
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 computers are very crucial in their lives. Children do
this
 type of
activies
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activities
activity
then
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they waste
of
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their
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lots of time and do not focus
in
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 their
study
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studies
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.
In addition
, they become indolent and
not
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take
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participate in other activities
such
 as sports, arts and many more. To give an overview, children should read
stories
 from a
book
 which increase their confidence, grasping power and focus on one
things
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.
However
, they
also
 need to watch some TV
program
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 and
playing
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 games
in
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on
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 computers for their
study life
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study-life
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 balance.
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