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Parents are the best teachers. Do you agree or disagree?

#parents #teachers
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It is true that
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 are the first and the most important
teachers
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 in our life. They give us not only knowledge and skills related to everyday affairs
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 but
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 teach us
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 important life values as love, respect, patience and forgiveness.
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 some individuals think that
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 are more qualified.
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, I totally agree that
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 are the best
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 in the world. On one hand, the basis of human history is founded by our
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.
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, school start at 6 years old, at
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 age children have already essential knowledge, they understand what is good and what is bad, and how to act correctly in various situations.
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 did not leave their kids alone at any time. They are always with them in the form of blessings and
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 provide guidance to achieve success in their growth.
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children learn more with
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 than at institutes.
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, there are some values that
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 can’t teach for children.
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 programmes we can learn math or physics, geography or science which is
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 factor in our future.
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,
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 can teach once or twice, but their time is limited. Plus,
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 have more time, especially mothers
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 not be tired of repeating one thing over and over for their infant. In conclusion, most of the vital life lessons that accompany us from very young and throughout our whole existence are not particularly acquired at school but rather are passed on to us by mom and dad.
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The introduction and conclusion are missing in the essay. Make sure to include a brief introduction that presents the topic and your position, as well as a conclusion that summarizes your main points.
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You have provided some relevant examples to support your main points, but they could be more specific and detailed. Include specific instances or personal experiences to make your examples more compelling.
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