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more students do their degree at a university abroad rather than in their own country. Do you agree?

#students #university #country
At present time, it is
common
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 trend that many
students
 prefer to study in
a foreign countries
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foreign countries
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 rather than their home country. In my perspective, I strongly agree with the notion that many individuals migrate to foreign countries for higher
education
. To commence with, there are many underlying reasons which
encourages
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 student' to get foreign
education
.
First
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 and foremost reason is that
students
 can access
to
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higher quality
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education
while
 studying
in
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the
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international universities.
Secondly
, by living in a different environment, many youngsters get a chance to explore
variety
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a variety
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 of different cultures and
perspective
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.
Thus
, it helps to enhance different kinds of languages and learn new skills.
Moreover
,
to stay
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 away from families
also
help
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students
for
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 personal growth and
give
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 sense of
responsibilities
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responsibility
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 and independence. Many
students
 learn life skills
such
 as managing financial situations, basic cooking and household chores,etc.
Furthermore
, the main advantage for
an
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international
students
 is that they have more job prospects and international networks, which help to get more job opportunities and become successful in their
career
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. In conclusion,
today's
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 globalization world ,
due to
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increase
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 number of competitions and higher inflation rates,one should have a good foreign
education
 degree and international networks to become successful in careers.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • higher quality education
  • different cultures
  • perspectives
  • language skills
  • personal growth
  • independence
  • job prospects
  • international networks
  • financial considerations
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