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The graph below gives information about the number of Catholics residing in different nations, during 2010-2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below gives information about the number of Catholics residing in different nations, during 2010-2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar graph provides information about the total number of Catholics living in six different countries in a given period of three years. The SI unit is measured in millions.
Overall
, the total human population in each continent decreased throughout the year. More
people
 resided in the Philippines as compared to other nations.
Although
, the
overall
 number of
people
 who stayed in China was high,
nevertheless
, India surpassed it with a high figure.
To begin
 with, 9
million
 mankind opted to stay in China in 2010, surprisingly, in the next three years the number escalated by an additional 7
million
people
. The figures in India were quite intriguing with 10,570,00 and 19,000,000 in 2010 and 2013 respectively.
By contrast
, the vast majority of Catholics were interested in the Philippines. In fact, almost 76
million
as well as
 72
million
 stayed in that country in 2010 and 2013 respectively which was the highest population recorded. Few
people
 were selected to live in Japan. Just 400,000 and almost 510, 000 in 2010 and 2013 respectively. The figures were the lowest recorded among other nations. Vietnam and Korea did not show much difference in their population.
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