The graph below gives information about the number of Catholics residing in different nations, during 2010-2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below gives information about the number of Catholics residing in different nations, during 2010-2013. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar graph provides information about the total number of Catholics living in six different countries in a given period of three years. The SI unit is measured in millions.
Overall
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, the total human population in each continent decreased throughout the year. More
people
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resided in the Philippines as compared to other nations.
Although
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, the
overall
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number of
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who stayed in China was high,
nevertheless
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, India surpassed it with a high figure.
To begin
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with, 9
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mankind opted to stay in China in 2010, surprisingly, in the next three years the number escalated by an additional 7
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people
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. The figures in India were quite intriguing with 10,570,00 and 19,000,000 in 2010 and 2013 respectively.
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, the vast majority of Catholics were interested in the Philippines. In fact, almost 76
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as well as
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72
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stayed in that country in 2010 and 2013 respectively which was the highest population recorded. Few
people
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were selected to live in Japan. Just 400,000 and almost 510, 000 in 2010 and 2013 respectively. The figures were the lowest recorded among other nations. Vietnam and Korea did not show much difference in their population.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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