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The graph below gives information about the number of Catholics residing in different nations, during 2010-2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below gives information about the number of Catholics residing in different nations, during 2010-2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The diagram illustrates the number of Catholic
people
leaving
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living
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 in China, India, Philippines, Vietnam, Korea, and Japan from 2010 to 2013. 
Overall
, the majority of
people
 lived in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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in
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for
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 all the years,
whereas
 the
least
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last
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 group of individuals lived in Japan. 
According to
 the data, a large proportion of
people
, at 75
millions
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million
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 and 72.000.000 respectively ,
habitated
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habituated
 in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 in 2010 and 2013.
However
, Japan bottomed out, at 400
thousands
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thousand
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 and 509
thousands
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thousand
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accordingly
. It is
also
 worth mentioning that India was preferable too, reaching a peak of 10 million
of
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apply
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people
, in 2010 and 19.000.000 in 2013. It can be seen from the graph that
Vietnam
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in Vietnam
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 there was almost an equal amount of
people
 in the years, 5
millions
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million
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 and 600
thousands
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thousand
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 and 5.321.168. As for Korea, it was a less popular place than other countries, reaching 5.270.000, and
then
 started to decline,
hit
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hitting
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 a low of 1 million
of
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residents.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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