Some people believe that culture will be ruined if it is useed to earn tourism revenue, but others consider that tourism is the only way of protecting culture. Dicuss both views and give your opinion.

Cultural diversity is
significanty
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significantly
appreciated in all parts of
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now a days
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.
Although
,
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many
people
opiniate
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opinionate
that showcasing
culture
to attract
tourists
for
finanical
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financial
gains could be damaging, the other group of
people
thinks
this
is the absolute method of preserving their
culture
. Calling a majority of
tourists
to visit
one
's
culture
or
locailty
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locality
can undoubtedly cause some problems
however
, the biggest question here is, restricting the
tourists
from
another places
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is the only way of
preotecting
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protecting
it? I do not think so as there are many different ways of doing so. On
one
side, those who consider that
tourism
has
negative
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a negative
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impact on
the
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cultural values
,
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might think
about
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that
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the large number of
people
coming to visit a cultural heritage can make it dirty with a lot of clutter as they may not contribute to
overall
cleaninness
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cleanliness
thinking about it's not their own
culture
.
For example
, someone who is
unware
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unaware
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of
one
's religion and custom of removing shoes
while
entering
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a temple might not just take off their shoes and make the temple floor filthy.
Moreover
, even the local residents can try to distort the originality of their
culture
for their financial growth which can lead to
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a mispresentation
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mispresentation
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misrepresentation
if
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of
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their
culture
.
For instance
, Indian traditional clothes are not
tranformed
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transformed
by numerous small business designers
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into
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Indowestern attires, which is completely distinct
than
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a
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traditional way of
wearning
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wearing
clothes because these Indowestern styles
is
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prefered
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preferred
by foreigners and sold more expensively.
Therefore
, there are undeniable reasons to not
agreeable
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with the fact that
tourism
can ruin the
culture
if not taken seriously. Having said that,
people
who believe that
only
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the only
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way of protecting our
culture
is
inviting
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by inviting
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visitors may input their rationale as
tourism
brings
the
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income to a locality which eventually helps
government
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the government
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to pay for
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the maintanence
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maintanence
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maintenance
of cultural infrastructures.
For example
, most of the buildings have an entrance fee for the sight seeing and more the number
of
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people
coming in,
more
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the more
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benefit
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benefits
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it will enclose.
On the contrary
, it is not the only solution and there are so many other ways to keep our
culture
safe,
one
of them is to educate
people
from outside
country
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the country
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or the local region about
one
's cultural practices and promote respect for all cultures.
For instance
, tourist guides can print crucial information to protect
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our
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heritage and encourage travellers to use proper guidelines to prevent any sort of damage.
To conclude
, it is our
repsonsibility
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responsibility
to protect
culture
but
tourism
is
also
paramount for any nation as it not only grows the economy of a country but
also
help
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helps
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promote
one
's
culture
.
However
, a burst of
people
coming to experience different
culture
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cultures
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can be
deterimental
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detrimental
as it could damage a property or change the originality of a cultural tradition
however
, stopping
tourism
is not
one
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and only solution to
this
concern as we can rather promote
tourists
about maintaining cleanliness, educating them about several steps to take in order to respect
one
's
culture
and heritage.
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