the plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and same park today.

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of local
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in the past and present, which had opened by 1920.
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, the Grange Park is situated between Arnold Avenue and Eldon Street. It is noticeable that there were significant renovations,
as a result
in the present layout is constructed underground car park, which is convenient with underground location.
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, the territory of
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is unchanged. The most conspicuous change has been made in the middle by replacing
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the rose
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with seating arrangements.
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the right side
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garden
there is appeared café and nearby
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this
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play area for children.
Furthermore
, the glasshouse was demolished and at present lies the water feature. Lest side
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experienced remarkable renovations like
rose
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garden
, which stayed at the bottom of the map
deleted
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.
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, the stage for musicians has
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in size with
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area for spectators. It is worth
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Amphitheatre
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for concerts. Both seating arrangements have deleted and
rose
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garden
that
is lies
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at the top of the map has
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unchanged.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recreational facilities
  • landscaping
  • naturalistic
  • amenities
  • formal gardens
  • ergonomic
  • symmetric designs
  • inclusive
  • accessible
  • accommodations
  • native plant species
  • societal changes
  • visitor services
  • community events
  • evolution
  • modern playgrounds
  • wildflower meadows
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