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the plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and same park today.

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sketch
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 of local
garden
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 in the past and present, which had opened by 1920.
Overall
, the Grange Park is situated between Arnold Avenue and Eldon Street. It is noticeable that there were significant renovations,
as a result
 in the present layout is constructed underground car park, which is convenient with underground location.
Moreover
, the territory of
park
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 is unchanged. The most conspicuous change has been made in the middle by replacing
fountain
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to
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 the rose
garden
 with seating arrangements.
In
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 the right side
instead
 of
rose
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garden
 there is appeared café and nearby
to
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this
 is
constructed
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 play area for children.
Furthermore
, the glasshouse was demolished and at present lies the water feature. Lest side
also
is
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experienced remarkable renovations like
rose
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garden
, which stayed at the bottom of the map
deleted
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.
Moreover
, the stage for musicians has
re-enacted
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 making
enormous
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 in size with
seating
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a seating
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 area for spectators. It is worth
to mention
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 that
this
 stage
currently
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Amphitheatre
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an Amphitheatre
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 for concerts. Both seating arrangements have deleted and
rose
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the rose
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garden
that
is lies
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 at the top of the map has
remain
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 unchanged.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recreational facilities
  • landscaping
  • naturalistic
  • amenities
  • formal gardens
  • ergonomic
  • symmetric designs
  • inclusive
  • accessible
  • accommodations
  • native plant species
  • societal changes
  • visitor services
  • community events
  • evolution
  • modern playgrounds
  • wildflower meadows
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