Some people say that the best to way to improve public health is by increasing number of sports facilities, others, however say that this would have little effect on public health and other measures are required. Discuss both view and give your opinion
According to
some people
, development
of Correct article usage
the development
sports
facilities
tends to increase public health
. However
, others suggest that there are many other factors to consider other than sports
facilities
when considering the
public Correct article usage
apply
health
. I agree with these opinions and think that increasing the sports
facilities
and other measures cause to
improve public Verb problem
will
health
.
First of all, most people
do not prefer to do their activities in busy sports
facilities
. Because there are long queues to reserve the facility due to
high demand. Therefore
, people
usually avoid these facilities
and do some inactive tasks during their leisure time. Doctors suggest that everybody should follow a kind of fat burning
activity thirty minutes per day. Add a hyphen
fat-burning
For example
, many people
in the UK reported in survey
, that the crowded workout Add an article
the survey
a survey
facilities
kept them away from attending. That's why to improve sports
facilities
to improve public health
.
Secondly
, not only the active lifestyle support
to Correct subject-verb agreement
supports
improve
Replace the word
improvement
the
Change preposition
of the
health
of the
society. But Correct article usage
apply
also
, healthy food pattern
Fix the agreement mistake
patterns
acts
a major role. Many Verb problem
play
people
are not aware about
the drawbacks of consuming Change the preposition
of
the
fast foods. Awareness programs related Correct article usage
apply
with
these things need to be held to improve the general knowledge of citizens. Change preposition
to
For instance
, a survey showed that,
around fifty Remove the comma
apply
percent
of Change the spelling
per cent
people
in the United States consumes
fast foods three to four times per week and they Change the verb form
consume
were
not aware Wrong verb form
are
about
the bad Change the preposition
of
health
benefits of them.
To conclude
, I strongly believe that both health
food patterns and Replace the word
healthy
sports
facilities
will help to increase the health
of the society.Submitted by kavindagehan17 on
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Task Response
Ensure that the essay addresses all aspects of the given topic and clearly presents both views. Focus on providing a balanced discussion and make sure to give a clear opinion at the end.
Coherence and Cohesion
Work on organizing the essay into clear, logical paragraphs with appropriate transitions between ideas. Pay attention to the structure of the introduction and conclusion to ensure they effectively frame the discussion.