Some people say that the best to way to improve public health is by increasing number of sports facilities, others, however say that this would have little effect on public health and other measures are required. Discuss both view and give your opinion
According to
some Linking Words
people
, Use synonyms
development
of Correct article usage
the development
sports
Use synonyms
facilities
tends to increase public Use synonyms
health
. Use synonyms
However
, others suggest that there are many other factors to consider other than Linking Words
sports
Use synonyms
facilities
when considering Use synonyms
the
public Correct article usage
apply
health
. I agree with these opinions and think that increasing the Use synonyms
sports
Use synonyms
facilities
and other measures Use synonyms
cause to
improve public Verb problem
will
health
.
First of all, most Use synonyms
people
do not prefer to do their activities in busy Use synonyms
sports
Use synonyms
facilities
. Because there are long queues to reserve the facility Use synonyms
due to
high demand. Linking Words
Therefore
, Linking Words
people
usually avoid these Use synonyms
facilities
and do some inactive tasks during their leisure time. Doctors suggest that everybody should follow a kind of Use synonyms
fat burning
activity thirty minutes per day. Add a hyphen
fat-burning
For example
, many Linking Words
people
in the UK reported in Use synonyms
survey
, that the crowded workout Add an article
the survey
a survey
facilities
kept them away from attending. That's why to improve Use synonyms
sports
Use synonyms
facilities
to improve public Use synonyms
health
.
Use synonyms
Secondly
, not only the active lifestyle Linking Words
support
to Correct subject-verb agreement
supports
improve
Replace the word
improvement
the
Change preposition
of the
health
of Use synonyms
the
society. But Correct article usage
apply
also
, healthy food Linking Words
pattern
Fix the agreement mistake
patterns
acts
a major role. Many Verb problem
play
people
are not aware Use synonyms
about
the drawbacks of consuming Change the preposition
of
the
fast foods. Awareness programs related Correct article usage
apply
with
these things need to be held to improve the general knowledge of citizens. Change preposition
to
For instance
, a survey showed thatLinking Words
,
around fifty Remove the comma
apply
percent
of Change the spelling
per cent
people
in the United States Use synonyms
consumes
fast foods three to four times per week and they Change the verb form
consume
were
not aware Wrong verb form
are
about
the bad Change the preposition
of
health
benefits of them.
Use synonyms
To conclude
, I strongly believe that both Linking Words
Use synonyms
health
food patterns and Replace the word
healthy
sports
Use synonyms
facilities
will help to increase the Use synonyms
health
of the society.Use synonyms
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