Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

some people believe that
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of in danger
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the most vital subject for worldwide attention in environmental
problems
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other people think there are more important subjects in the
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field
fields
of
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the envirnoment
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envirnoment
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environment
. There
plenty
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are plenty
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of logical reasons for accepting both
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belive
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believe
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animal
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animals
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and plants are
most
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the most
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vital things in our time of living.
i
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will discuss both
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sides'
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reasons and
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will mention my thoughts
among
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in
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following
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sentences.
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, some groups of people
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are
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belive
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believe
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animals
and jungle
problems
are the most important
side
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with
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for better
envirnomental
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environmental
issues and
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i
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think
it
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this
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is a correct statement.
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of other related
problems
if
animals
and
plants
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plant
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traits vanished from our
world
it could impact significantly
on
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our food chain demand,
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it may cause big
problems
for all
alive
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living
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creatures in the
world
.
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mentioned issue may impact greatly
in
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other
environments
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aspects of our planet,
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extinction of rain forests in
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the Amazon
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, Brazil has the greatest impact on global
worming
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warming
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and
therefore
our life and where we live.
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extinction
problems
are not a revertable
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and it means that we can not make these
animals
alive again.
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goups
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groups
as
non-belivers
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non-believers
stand on the idea that there are more
imprtant sujects
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important subjects
rather than
animals
and
and
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our green creatures. They think
problems
like consuming coals for
manufacters
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manufacturers
and
emissons
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emissions
of CO2 are
the
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one of these mentioned subjects.
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,
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a Higher
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level of
water
in
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salt
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water
oceans and
lack
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a lack
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of sources
for
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of
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sweet
water
can ruin every
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place
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in the
word
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world
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,
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example
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there is a
plotical
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political
view that
stand
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on the idea that
lack
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a lack
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water
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of water
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may start
the
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world
war iii. In
conslusion
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conclusion
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of
mentioned
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debate, But
i
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I
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beleive
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believe
our connection with
animal
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animals
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and
plantes
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plants
and their presence in the
world
are
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is
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the most important issue
the
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that
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we have to tackle
with for preventing
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to prevent
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any kind of harmful environmental
problems
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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