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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #time #loss #species #plants #animals
some people believe that
extinction
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the extinction
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 of in danger
animals
 and plants
are
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is
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 the most vital subject for worldwide attention in environmental
problems
, In
contrasts
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contrast
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 other people think there are more important subjects in the
fiels
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field
fields
 of
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the envirnoment
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envirnoment
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environment
. There
plenty
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are plenty
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 of logical reasons for accepting both
side
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sides
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, But
i
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I
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belive
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believe
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animal
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animals
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 and plants are
most
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the most
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 vital things in our time of living.
i
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I
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 will discuss both
side's
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sides'
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 reasons and
i
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I
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 will mention my thoughts
among
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in
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following
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the following
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 sentences.
Fisrtly
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Firstly
, some groups of people
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are
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belive
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believe
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animals
 and jungle
problems
 are the most important
side
 to tackle
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apply
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with
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for better
envirnomental
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environmental
 issues and
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I
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i
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I
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 think
it
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this
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 is a correct statement.
Although
 of other related
problems
 if
animals
 and
plants
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plant
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 traits vanished from our
world
 it could impact significantly
on
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apply
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our food chain demand,
Therefore
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apply
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it may cause big
problems
 for all
alive
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living
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 creatures in the
world
.
Also
 mentioned issue may impact greatly
in
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apply
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other
environments
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environmental
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 aspects of our planet,
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example
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example,
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 extinction of rain forests in
Amazon
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the Amazon
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, Brazil has the greatest impact on global
worming
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warming
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 and
therefore
 our life and where we live.
Also
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Also,
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 extinction
problems
 are not a revertable
subjects
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subject
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 and it means that we can not make these
animals
 alive again.
Secondly
, Other
goups
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groups
 as
non-belivers
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non-believers
 stand on the idea that there are more
imprtant sujects
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important subjects
 rather than
animals
 and
and
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our green creatures. They think
problems
 like consuming coals for
manufacters
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manufacturers
 and
emissons
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emissions
 of CO2 are
the
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apply
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one of these mentioned subjects.
In addition
,
Higher
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a Higher
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 level of
water
 in
salted
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salt
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water
 oceans and
lack
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a lack
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 of sources
for
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of
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 sweet
water
 can ruin every
places
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place
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 in the
word
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world
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,
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example
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example,
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 there is a
plotical
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political
 view that
stand
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stands
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 on the idea that
lack
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a lack
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water
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of water
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 may start
the
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apply
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world
 war iii. In
conslusion
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conclusion
, There are dozens of reasons for both
side
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sides
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 of
mentioned
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the mentioned
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 debate, But
i
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I
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beleive
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believe
 our connection with
animal
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animals
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 and
plantes
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plants
 and their presence in the
world
are
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is
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 the most important issue
the
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that
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 we have to tackle
with for preventing
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to prevent
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 any kind of harmful environmental
problems
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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