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This chart gives information about number of travellers using three airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000.

This chart gives information about number of travellers using three airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000.
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This
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 chart gives information about
number
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 of travellers using three airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000. Looking at the chart, we can see
airport
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 Newark showed equal attendance for more than 3 consecutive years from 1998 to 2000. But, John F. Kennedy's
airport
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 provided
slightely
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slightly
 less number of visitors than Newark by 1999. In 1995, Newark was the lowest and
gave
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 only 16 million
number of
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guests but interestingly, the next year it showed
the
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an
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increasing
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almost
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of almost
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 twice as
much
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many
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 visiting. In 2000, LaGuardia
were
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 visited most by half of the visitants compared to 50 million of those visited in 1999 and approximately 46 million of guested people in 1998. Info of graph in 1995 was the least popular in comparison with all other statistics of travellers.
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, John F. Kennedy
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showed considerably more numerator of guests in 1997 than in 1995. In general, we can observe that LaGuardia is the most striking indication
and
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that
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 travellers prefer
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airport
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 but the popularity of LaGuardia's
airport
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 with new social may
effect
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affect
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to
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the
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future indications.
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