The bar chart below shows the total number of Olympic medals won by twelve different countries.

The bar chart below shows the total number of Olympic medals won by twelve different countries.
The bar graph illustrates the number of Olympic
medals
attained by twelve distinct countries (
USA
, Soviet Union, UK, France, Germany, Italy, Sweden, Australia, Hungary, East Germany,
Japan
,
China
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and China
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).
Overall
, the
USA
won the most
medals
and
China
accomplishes
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accomplished
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the least number of
medals
. The two countries that achieved the highest quantity of
medals
are
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were
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the
USA
and Soviet Union. The
USA
won nearly 1,000
gold
medals
, approximately 700 to 800
silver
medals
and around 600
bronze
medals
.
As a result
of
this
, the
USA
gained a total of 2,300
medals
. The
second to highest
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country in terms of
medals
is the Soviet Union. They won a sum of 1,000
medals
consisting of 400
medals
that are
gold
, 300
silver
and
bronze
medals
.
On the contrary
, the two countries that achieved the least amount of
medals
are
China
and
Japan
.
Japan
attained around
a
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100
gold
,
silver
and
bronze
medals
.
China
gained a slightly higher amount of
medals
than
Japan
, having approximately 150
gold
medals
, 100
silver
medals
and 70
bronze
medals
.
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