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Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste?

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Some
people
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 assert that recycling household
waste
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 is not adequate.
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 reason, recycling should be mandatory by official authorities.
While
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this
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 policy can be beneficial, I would argue that other measures through education should be taken into consideration. The main advantage of adopting legislation for recycling is that
people
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 may have to accompany
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 plan, especially those who are less concerned about environmental issues. In fact, it is suggested that
people
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 may not take responsibility for social issues,
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 as contamination by household
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, in accordance with their personal characteristics, followed by unreliability both personally and socially.
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, it seems that there is no option unless governments approve laws to mandate
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 citizens to become more sensitive and responsible, as they know that not cooperating can have legal consequences.
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, rules may encourage
people
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 to aid local administrators in recycling their
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,
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 experiences indicate
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 policy could not be effective in mitigating other social problems. Notwithstanding, governments can implement several plans to spread recycling among houses.
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,
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 should be responsible for their society to make it a better place for life. As there is a close connection between childhood upbringing and their character, they should learn at schools to recycle their
waste
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 to preserve the environment.
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, educational institutions and the media can trigger and increase public awareness about
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 subject.
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 means that if
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 are informed about various irreplaceable consequences of not cleaning cities by recycling, from water and soil contamination to the spread of diseases, they will cooperate effectively with local recycling programs without any laws, leading to a higher level of success without extra costs either economically or technically.
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, nurturing a more productive society can be a conducive solution not only in recycling but
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 in other setbacks. In conclusion, laws for recycling may be useful for a few
people
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 with special personalities, yet
people
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 should be taught to take action responsibly and volunteer to assist governments in recycling, as it is proven that rules cannot have a long-term effect.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Waste management
  • Recycling
  • Sustainability
  • Mandatory
  • Voluntary
  • Legislative measures
  • Environmental impact
  • Public awareness
  • Regulation
  • Sanctions
  • Compliance
  • Recycling facilities
  • Consumer behavior
  • Waste reduction
  • Resource conservation
  • Circular economy
  • Eco-friendly
  • Biodegradable
  • Landfill
  • Global initiative
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