The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.

The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.
The pie charts compare the portion of
incomes
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income
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that
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spent in
household
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households
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by
Malaysia
and
Japan
in terms of five categories in the year 2010.
Overall
, it's clear that Housing and Food were the highest expenditures in
Malaysia
.
However
,Other goods and Services and Food had the most
of
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expenses in
Japan
.
besides
Transport and Healthcare which
were
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the lowest proportion of incomes,
also
the lowest budget in
Japan
related to
health care
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healthcare
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. The numbers demonstrate Other goods and Services had the maximum
spendings
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spending
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at 29% and 26% respectively in
Japan
and
Malaysia
.At the same
time
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Japan
had the lowest amount of budget with 6% in Health care,
likewise
,the least of all expenditures in
Malaysia
related to health care at 3%. The pie chart
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there was a difference in the amount
money
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of money
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which
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spent
in
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on
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transport in
Malaysia
and
Japan
at 20% and 10% respectively.
Although
food accounted for 24% in
Japan
in comparison with
Malaysia
with 27%.
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  • household expenditures
  • proportion
  • cultural differences
  • economic differences
  • living standards
  • real estate market
  • public transportation
  • private transportation
  • infrastructure
  • government healthcare policies
  • quality of life
  • holistic view
  • inflation
  • economic growth
  • societal norms
  • globalization
  • communication expenses
  • education expenses
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