The pie charts compare the average amount of money family spent in Japan and Malaysia in 2010.
The pie charts compare the average amount of money
family
spent in Correct article usage
a family
Japan
and Malaysia
in 2010.
Overall
, it is obvious other goods and services wear the highest expenditure in Japan
while
in Malaysia
housing allocate
the largest proportion. Change the verb form
allocates
Also
, health care in both Japan
and Malaysia
allocated the lowest number this
year.
In 2010, spending on other goods and services in Japan
as well as
Malaysia
was at
Change preposition
apply
the
close proportion at 29 % And 26 % respectively. Meantime, in Correct article usage
a
food
both countries’ citizens showed Add a comma
food,
alike
percentage. In detail, food In Correct article usage
a alike
Japan
showed 24% and in Malaysia
was 27%.
Malaysia
’s household expenditure was at 37% of their budget on housing on
Change preposition
in
the
contrast Japanese allocated 21% for Correct article usage
apply
this
prepose. People who live in Japan
spent 20% of their money on transport, which was the
twice time as much as the figure for Correct article usage
apply
Malaysia
. Expenditures of families in both Japan
and Malaysian
were lowest on health care, with 6% and 3% respectively.Replace the word
Malaysia
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