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it is common these days to see celebrities advertising different products. do the advantages of this development outweight the disadvantages. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience.

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These days, many
celebrities
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 on social media commercialize many kinds of
products
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 that they receive from diverse
brands
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.
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 act is a
brand
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's new way to advertise
their
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its
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products
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 to the public in order to gain popularity.
Thus
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, I will explain the reasons in
this
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 essay. With social media coming into the picture of advertising, many
brands
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 started to use
celebrities
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 to commercialise their
products
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, which can benefit
both
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 sides, the
celebrities
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 and the
brand
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.
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, the public figures would gain an income
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 the
brand
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 received recognition from the public figures' audience or fans.
As a result
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 of the popularity, the company
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 will receive more customers. Despite the positive advantages, many people believe that having
celebrities
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 advertising different
products
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 on their socials can spark the competitiveness of
brands
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 in terms of gaining popularity for their
products
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. An example from the writer's friend's experience, she received a request from a food
brand
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 to review their foods and post the results online. Being a popular public figure in the culinary field, she accepted the request and posted the commercialised
products
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 to her social media followed by her review. From
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 experience,
both
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 parties gained some positive advantages,
whereas
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 the writer's friend received offers from other culinary
brands
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, meanwhile, the restaurant had doubled in customers and income. In conclusion, seeing artists reviewing and advertising different kinds of
products
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 may bring about competitiveness for the
brand
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 companies. It can
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 bring benefits to
both
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 sides, where
both
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 the
brand
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 and
celebrities
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 can earn more recognition and income from the audiences.
Therefore
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, the advantages trumps the disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • celebrities
  • advertising
  • products
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • development
  • increased visibility
  • brand awareness
  • credibility
  • trust
  • higher sales
  • wider target audience
  • endorsement
  • costs
  • overexposure
  • authenticity
  • backlash
  • negative impact
  • brand image
  • ineffectiveness
  • match
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